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What This Writer Did in 2013

Carolyn Mulford Posted on December 29, 2013 by CarolynDecember 29, 2013

Making notes for my annual letter, I realized almost everything I did in 2013 involved my Show Me mystery series. The series—with four books in different stages—took over the year.

In January I submitted the third book, Show Me the Gold, to the publisher. A day or two later the content editor emailed her comments on the second book, Show Me the Deadly Deer. Only minor points, but they took time and care. In warm weather that manuscript came back to me two more times, for a check of the copyediting and for proofing before it went to the printer.

The first book, Show Me the Murder, came out in hardcover February 15. (The Kindle edition was released in August.) In early February came the year’s biggest thrill for me: reading the first review. It appeared in Kirkus Reviews. Just the fact that Kirkus bothered to review my book was positive, and so was the review.  Then came good reviews in Library Journal and other publications. Happy times.

After struggling to find a publisher for years, I was relieved and gratified by the reviewers’ comments. I put snippets of those on the invitations to my book launch in March.

From then on I spent a lot of time promoting Show Me the Murder. One bonus for those efforts: I introduced The Feedsack Dress to new readers. While promoting challenged and rewarded me, the process bores anyone else. I’ll just say that I sent out review copies to Missouri publications (the publisher sends to national ones), gave talks at libraries and other places, served on panels at three mystery conferences, taught three writing workshops, and did signings with and without readings. I’m used to public speaking and always prepare well, so these events were no big deal.

Only one appearance worried me, a regional Young Authors’ Day in Warrensburg. The organizer sent me 10 second graders’ winning stories, essays, and poems to comment on both in writing and orally after each child read his or her piece before peers and parents. Plus I had to invent a writing exercise for them. I really dreaded opening the envelope containing their work and coming up with helpful, positive comments.

To my relief, they wrote much better than I expected. I was able to write genuine editorial comments. I consulted with friends who had taught elementary school. They warned me some kids would be afraid to read in front of strangers. No one suggested a great writing exercise. I really wanted to back out.

It went great, though one little girl faced me rather than the audience and read so softly that only I who could hear her. And none of the kids knew what I was talking about when I mentioned a teeter-totter in an analogy. Apparently it has been banned from playgrounds.

Through the winter and spring I stewed over the next book until a plot and theme held my interest. I made notes, did some research, named characters, and, in May, started to write Show Me the Ashes. I’m still writing.

In November, Kirkus gave Deadly Deer, its first review, a good one. I was happy but not overjoyed. Nothing equals that first time.

—Carolyn Mulford

Posted in Events, Mysteries, News, Show Me Series

Show Me the Deadly Deer Released

Carolyn Mulford Posted on December 23, 2013 by CarolynDecember 23, 2013

 

The second book in the Show Me mystery series has been released in Kindle and hardcover editions. I’ve already received a reader’s comment on the Kindle edition (my cousin loved it), but the hardcover won’t reach stores and libraries for a few days.

Show Me the Deadly Deer features the main characters introduced in Show Me the Murder. Former CIA covert operative Phoenix Smith tells the story, which begins when Acting Sheriff Annalynn Carr Keyser enlists Phoenix’s help in looking for a missing farmer.

You can read a teaser summary and the first chapter on the Show Me the Deadly Deer page.

Kirkus Reviews published the first review, its summary saying, “Small-town Missouri again proves almost as dangerous to a former CIA agent as European back alleys. Mulford’s second provides plenty of excitement as readers wend their ways through a slew of suspects.”

St. Louis Post-Dispatch reviewer Harry Levins notes that the book depicts the murder rate in rural Missouri as urban high but says, “Still, the local color can be colorful indeed.”

Hardcover prices at online bookstores vary from day to day, so if you want to order a copy online, check more than one site.

—Carolyn Mulford

Posted in Mysteries, News, Show Me Series

Interview: Judy Hogan Shares Her Writing Techniques

Carolyn Mulford Posted on December 18, 2013 by CarolynDecember 18, 2013
Judy Hogan; Photo by Mark Schmerling

Judy Hogan; Photo by Mark Schmerling

Judy Hogan has led the writing life for fifty years. In October 2013 one publisher released her second mystery, Farm Fresh and Fatal, and another her fifth book of poetry, Beaver Soul. She also has written two nonfiction books, founded and served as editor of Carolina Wren Press (1976-1991), and continues to teach courses in writing fiction, poetry, and creative nonfiction (e.g., diary/memoir).Her mystery series reflects her deep roots in social activism and in North Carolina. The first book, Killer Frost (Mainly Murder Press, 2012), involves educational and financial fraud on a historically black college campus, a setting she knows well. Farm Fresh and Fatal focuses on another familiar place, a farmers’ market, with vendors holding different views on sustainable agriculture and genetically modified produce.

I interviewed Judy about why and how she writes mysteries.

Q: You’ve written poetry and prose, nonfiction and fiction. Why did you choose to write traditional mysteries?

I started reading mysteries in 1981, when I was forty-four. My eldest child had gone off to college, and I had a little more time in the evening when I was too tired to work. I began with Golden Age authors my father recommended. He’d been reading them all his adult life, and I’d never understood why. He was a minister who escaped by reading mysteries? A puzzle I now understand. I read Agatha Christie, Dorothy L. Sayers, Ngaio Marsh, Josephine Tey, P.D. James.

In 1990, I was having a writing vacation (to write poetry) on the Gower Peninsula in Wales, and instead of ranging around the cliffs, I was housebound with a sprained ankle. My landlady in the B&B, who could never get me to watch the telly because I wanted to read mysteries, said, “Judy, why don’t you write a murder?” I began to plot one set in a B&B, with my landlady as a character.

I didn’t know I was writing a traditional mystery. It was later in a workshop with Margaret Maron that I learned that. I did try to publish The Sands of Gower. I even had a nice rejection letter from Ruth Cavin, the legendary editor at St. Martin’s. I had always thought that writing poetry was my best genre, and maybe that’s true, but I found mysteries fun to write, and in them I was able to do some things that I couldn’t do in my nonfiction writing. I could invent characters and put them together and see what they would do, and in this way learn things I didn’t know I knew about myself and other people. That’s the magic of fiction for me. I also like happy endings. Some books have tragedy, but there’s still a sense of completion and a transformation.

Q: How did your experience writing essays, memoir, and poetry help you in writing your mysteries?

I think all writing you do helps other writing. I keep a diary, write in it every morning, and that has proved a good way to clear out my mind of trivia. Then I write a poem, an essay, or get ready to write fiction. I had learned in those other forms that I wrote better and more effectively, in a way to touch other people more, if I went deeper, and the part of me that I call the Muse, or the true creativity, came into play. So I came closer to my writing goals. I don’t usually have characters wake me up, but they definitely come alive in my mind. Over the years I had already developed a good relationship with my Muse, and pen to paper had become natural, comfortable.

Mainly Murder Press, 2013

Mainly Murder Press, 2013

Q: You present issues important to you in your mysteries. Those issues help propel the plot, motivate the characters, and establish the setting. Even so, the mystery dominates the message, and your endings surprise readers. What techniques did you use in conceiving and writing Farm Fresh and Fatal to assure storytelling didn’t cross over into preaching?

The thing about fiction and mysteries in particular is that you have a moral universe. I have a heroine and various admirable characters, and then I have a killer and some characters who are annoying in one way or another. My killers aren’t usually purely evil, but they have become desperate or in some way, lost their perspective or become obsessed. So the basic plot of the mystery serves me to highlight problems in the community that in some way “spawn” a killer.

Once I have my idea of the problem I want to focus on (and I’ve worked on all the ones I take up with the activist side of my personality) and set up the good and bad characters, the murderer and the suspects, the plot tends to highlight the situation in the community that worries me. I like speaking this way about issues, and after being involved in local politics, this suits me better. I often upset people in a grassroots effort because I tend to be blunt, and even the good guys sometimes become pompous and don’t like to hear someone speak the truth. I can speak all the truth I want in my books and make fun of people who annoy me, even kill them off!

Q: You introduce a lot of characters in the early chapters but manage to make each one distinctive. How do you go about choosing and creating characters?

I have an ongoing heroine/sleuth, Penny Weaver, loosely based on me, my age, a poet, with many of my interests, but her voice is a little more satirical than mine. Her lover/husband Kenneth was her first sidekick, and then a character I wholly invented, Sammie Hargrave, an African American, came to life, and I liked her so much that I found her an ideal sidekick, more even than Kenneth, who tends to worry about Penny’s always seeming to end up face to face with the murderer. Sammie also balances Penny’s usually good behavior. Sammie will deceive, take on criminals with karate moves, and is generally ready for anything.

I use Elizabeth George’s Write Away strategies for character and plot development. I write down all the characters I need. After this many books, I already have a lot to choose from, since an interracial group of activists works on issues in my fictional Riverdell.

Actual people sometimes get me going. People are each so different when you get to know them, and their quirks help me make them unique and provide humor, hopefully. My goal is that each one lives individually for the reader. I still work at that, but they come alive better if I know how they talk, behave, what their background is, what their “core need” is and what they do when they can’t have what they believe they need. The Muse helps. I often ask her questions re characters and plot, and she makes suggestions, which I almost always follow. Knowing the characters well helps me plot.

Q: One of your ongoing themes is rocky relationships between mothers and their adult daughters. Are you taking a personal risk here? What do your daughters think of the scenes between Penny, the main character, and her somewhat unstable daughter Sarah?

Oh, my. I’ve given my books to my two daughters, and I don’t think either one has read them, and perhaps they won’t recognize themselves, though they have both, and my son, too, given me pause over the years. In the end my life is richer because my kids gave me a hard time, even to our needing some therapy as a divorced family, to get them raised. Those conflicts are still vivid to me. It’s easy for me to write scenes between adult children and their parents. My oldest is fifty-one, and my youngest is forty-one, and I hope they don’t take offense if/when they read the books. I’m taking the risk.

Mainly Murder Press, 2012

Mainly Murder Press, 2012

Q: What are you writing now? What’s next?

Saturday, December 7, I wrote the last words of the first draft of Pernicious Poll. It’s about North Carolina’s new harsh voting law, which in its effects is quite discriminatory against African Americans and the poor.

I hope to get the very first mystery I wrote out next. I’ve revised The Sands of Gower, and I think readers will like to go back to when Penny met Kenneth. Tormentil Hall, which comes after Farm Fresh, also takes place on Gower in Wales, and I think the readers need the first novel to enjoy fully the eighth. My publishing sequence is going to be mixed up, but that’s already true.

Q: Many people look forward to leaving their day job and writing mysteries as a second (or even primary) career. What’s the single most important advice you give the person who wants to become a mystery writer?

Love doing it, do it because it makes you happy, whether you sell it or not. Write what you wish to write–the advice of Virginia Woolf, Louise Penny, Carolyn Hart, Elizabeth George. Go for broke, and then get good feedback you trust. It might be a group, or one person. I didn’t find that critique groups worked for me, but I now have two readers. Both love to read mysteries, both are honest but essentially like what I do. That is helping tremendously. They find the things I miss or didn’t make clear. Of course, read good books. The best models make the best writers.

Q: What have been the most satisfying comments on Farm Fresh and Fatal?

I was fortunate to have a blurb from Carolyn Hart: “Farm Fresh and Fatal features an appealing protagonist, an intriguing background, and well-realized characters. Readers will enjoy these characters and empathize with their successes and failures. In the tradition of Margaret Maron.”

A writer friend of mine, Sharon Ewing, wrote one. Your close friends sometimes aren’t that impressed with your writing, but Sharon reviewed the book, quite thoughtfully and appreciatively, on Amazon. She said, “The first sentence of the book plunges into the action that will carry the reader to the fast-paced turns and twists of the final chapter.”

Then recently, November 30, Ruth Moose reviewed it in a little paper in Southern Pines, The Pilot. She wrote, “Hogan writes with passion and knowledge about genetically modified foods that can produce ‘tomatoes that bounce like ping pong balls,’ and the community of those who know and love the earth.” She made my day. Newspaper reviews are hard to get in these times. You can read the full review at http://www.thepilot.com/search/?t=article&s=start_time&sd=desc&d1=5+years+ago&q=Book+Review%3A+Farm+Fresh+and+Fatal.

Judy, thanks you for sharing your expertise.

—Carolyn Mulford

Finishing Line Press, 2013

Finishing Line Press, 2013

For information on ordering autographed copies of her mysteries and poetry, email judyhogan at mindspring.com or visit her website (http://judyhogan.home.mindspring.com) or blog (http://postmenopausalzest.blogspot.com).

Copies of her mysteries (in paper and e-book format) are available from major online bookstores and mainlymurderpress.com

Copies of Beaver Soul may be ordered from Amazon (search Finishing Line Press chapbooks) and Finishing Line Press.

 

 

Posted in Mysteries, Mysterious Ways, Uncategorized

Personal Experience Prompted My Historical Novel

Carolyn Mulford Posted on December 3, 2013 by CarolynDecember 3, 2013

For many years I made my living as a nonfiction writer, striving to gather the essential facts and present material objectively.

Then, after traveling around the world, I came home and marveled at how life in rural Missouri had changed. My generation was the last to grow up in a nation made up of small, diversified, family farms, the ones growing most of their own food (vegetables, fruit, and meat) and a variety of crops to feed their animals and to sell for what they couldn’t produce.

I wanted to preserve the record of what life had been like in the mid 20th century, but what could I write that people would read? The topic exceeded the bounds of a feature article. I lacked both the expertise and the desire to write a socio-economic tome about the country’s transition. My childhood was too uneventful for a memoir in the mode of Laura Ingalls Wilder’s Little House books.

That left fiction. I had vivid memories of edging from childhood toward adulthood in the 1950s, and I wanted to reach readers going through that mix of elation and misery. I read social histories of the period that brought home how much the whole nation changed after World War II.

On our farm, the big change came with the arrival of electricity in the late 1940s. I decided to focus on that period, a time of transition for our farm and for the nation. Then my story should feature a transition for the main character. The big one came when a g country kid finished the eighth grade at a one-room rural school and entered a much larger junior high in town.

The idea for The Feedsack Dress began to form. I began to make a slow transition from nonfiction to fiction.

—Carolyn Mulford

 

Posted in News, The Feedsack Dress, Young Adult

Workshop: Writing Your Past Into Fiction

Carolyn Mulford Posted on December 3, 2013 by CarolynDecember 3, 2013

Our lives are part of the long continuum of human history, but how do you use your tiny fragment in a novel?

At 10:30 a.m., Saturday, December 7, I’ll answer that question during a workshop in the Columbia (MO) Public Library. I’ll talk about how I drew on memory, others’ memories, library research, and imagination in writing The Feedsack Dress, an MG/YA novel set in northeast Missouri in 1949. Using short readings, I’ll illustrate such points as incorporating real life into your plot and c haracterizations.

We draw on our experience no matter what we write. I’ll touch on how I’ve done that in writing my Show Me mystery series.

To register, call 573-443-3161.

—Carolyn Mulford

Posted in Events, News, The Feedsack Dress

Interview Posted on Writers Who Kill

Carolyn Mulford Posted on November 21, 2013 by CarolynNovember 21, 2013

The upcoming release of Show Me the Deadly Deer prompted E. B. Davis to interview me for a mystery writers’ group blog, Writers Who Kill.

 

Among the questions E. B. posed were the following.

The law enforcement underestimates and undervalues two of your three main characters, which they use to their advantage. If this typical behavior?

When it comes to the political arena, your characters show their acumen. Is politics different than law enforcement?

Your use of internal dialogue reveals the duplicity and complexity of Phoenix’s life. How do you reveal without over justifying her actions?

Do you think women must team together to overcome the odds of prejudice?

E. B. posted my answers today, November 20, at www.writerswhokill.blogspot.com.

 

Posted in News releases, Show Me Series

How JFK’s Assassination Affected Dessie, Ethiopia

Carolyn Mulford Posted on November 17, 2013 by CarolynNovember 17, 2013

Friday night, November 22, 1963, Dessie, Ethiopia

A group of us were chatting at the guys’ house after a tough week of teaching when my housemate, Peace Corps Volunteer Arwilda Bryant, ran in.

Everyone shut up as she gasped for breath. Arwilda wouldn’t have come out alone late at night and risked attacks by hyenas or feral dogs without good reason.

“Kennedy’s been shot,” she choked out. “I just heard it on the radio.” She told us all she knew: The President had been shot while riding in an open car in Dallas and taken to a hospital.

We called the other half dozen Peace Corps Volunteers in Dessie, Ethiopia, a mountainous provincial capital, and huddled around the guys’ short-wave radio, straining to hear through the static. Well after midnight, on November 23, we heard the shocking news that President John Fitzgerald Kennedy had died.

We felt a special connection to the man. He spoke to our 300-plus Ethiopia I Peace Corps group on the soggy White House lawn during our training. The press called us Kennedy’s kids.

The next morning Arwilda, my other housemate (Pat Summers), and I slept late. A little after eight someone knocked on our door. A student who lived in the shed behind our house let the person in. I dressed quickly and went to the living room.

An Indian colleague at the Woizero Siheen High School had heard the radio report that morning and come to our house immediately to express his sympathy. He gave us the latest news and addressed us as though we were members of JFK’s family.

Over cups of tea, Mr. Singh recounted with great emotion his memories of Mahatma Gandhi’s assassination in 1948, drawing parallels between the two leaders and the grief and uncertainty their violent deaths evoked in their home countries and around the world.

He asked what the President’s death would mean to the United States. Was the vice president involved? After all, the assassination took place in his home state. We assured him that Lyndon Johnson had no connection to the killer and the American people would accept the new president. Would we Volunteers be recalled? Kennedy had sent us. We assured him that JFK’s death would not end our service.

All that day faculty members—Ethiopian, Indian, and South African—and students came to the Peace Corps houses with the same expressions of sympathy and the same questions. That afternoon we received word that the governor had arranged a special mass the next morning for us, local dignitaries, and faculty members.

The assassination of the dynamic young President had stunned, saddened, and alarmed even our isolated mountain-top town. More surprising to us, Ethiopians and the few foreigners in Dessie regarded the Peace Corps Volunteers not just as Kennedy’s representatives but as his family. Years later in the Capitol Rotunda, I took part in a returned PCVs’ marathon reading of accounts of those days. All had similar experiences.

In Dessie, the PCVs met to discuss what we could do as representatives of our country. The only thing we could come with was to wear black for a few days. We assured the students, and the headmaster, that we would be in our classrooms Monday.

With no television or movie newsreels, no international newspapers, limited radio, and little possibility of international telephone contact, we had little idea what was happening in the United States and the rest of the world. Our main news source, Newsweek, wouldn’t come for days. One of the first photos we saw showed the diminutive Haile Selassie marching behind the cortege with towering Charles de Gaulle.

On Monday, the students in my first eleventh grade English class sat somber and silent. I told them, and each succeeding class, what had happened in Dallas and explained the Constitutional provision for the vice president to succeed the president. Then I invited them to ask questions. They were expecting civil war in the United States. No matter what I said, they remained convinced that Lyndon Johnson engineered the assassination and that Jack Ruby killed Lee Harvey Oswald to cover up the conspiracy. They expected the PCVs, half the school’s faculty, to be recalled or abandoned by the U.S. government.

The students remained tense all week. Eventually they recognized that in the United States a leader’s violent death didn’t signal war.

The assassination disillusioned people everywhere. Through the Peace Corps and other programs, John Fitzgerald Kennedy projected hope that democratic government and economic betterment, the American dream, could flourish in the Third World. The world looked to the United States as a beacon of hope and generosity.

Over the last 50 years that image has faded. Yet in the United States and elsewhere, people remember President John Fitzgerald Kennedy and these words: “Ask not what your country can do for you—ask what you can do for your country.”

—Carolyn Mulford

Posted in News

Ten Common Mistakes New Mystery Writers Make

Carolyn Mulford Posted on October 22, 2013 by CarolynOctober 22, 2013

All writers differ, but those writing their first (and maybe second or third) mystery usually make at least two or three of ten common mistakes. I base this list on what I’ve observed in reading other writers’ works in progress and what they’ve said about my manuscripts.

The mistakes vary in the manuscript’s different sections: two to three opening chapters, twenty to thirty middle chapters, and three to five final chapters.

The opening chapters

The hardest and most important section to perfect is the opening. Most agents and editors tell us they won’t read beyond the third page (some not beyond the first paragraph) if the story doesn’t grab them. From what I’ve heard, a majority of readers will give the writer until the end of the first chapter. If you can’t move the professional or the casual reader past the opening chapters, your exciting middle chapters and dynamic ending won’t matter. Watch out for these problems in your opening chapters.

1.   A lengthy backstory

Start your story with a crucial event or action, not your biographical notes on the protagonist. Find the corpse or foreshadow the murder in the first chapter.

Give the necessary backstory in phrases or sentences, not paragraphs or pages. Let actions reveal character and aptitudes. Show your protagonist through others’ eyes.

Set the tone and voice of the entire book in your first chapter.

2.   Long descriptions of the setting or the characters

Find the telling details that put the reader in the time and place.

Give thumbnails of the main characters or settings and add information as needed.

3.   A prologue revealing a dramatic point late in the book

If an event is critical, make it part of chapter one.

If your beginning lacks action or suspense, write a new one.

4.   Multiple characters

Introduce your protagonist immediately so readers identify with that person.

Limit characters to those whom you would remember at a networking event.

The middle chapters

We tend to spend so much time rewriting the opening that we neglect the much longer middle, the heart of the investigation and of character development. By this stage, readers tend to put the book down at the end of a chapter. Each chapter must motivate them to pick up the book again. Writers’ most common mistakes involve pacing.

5.   A lack of action

Something must happen in every chapter. Check that by writing a headline for each chapter.

Continue conflict—in solving the crime, in reaching the protagonist’s goals, in personal and professional interactions.

6.   Clues or characterizations that reveal too much

Present three or four viable suspects and speculate on at least two motives.

Use gray rather than black and white in portraying suspects.

7.   Indistinguishable characters

Give each named character a memorable characteristic—appearance, mannerism, speech pattern, etc.

Make each person’s speech distinctive—vocabulary, grammar, syntax, rhythm.

The final chapters

Those last chapters must evoke emotion and stimulate the intellect. If readers feel cheated because previous chapters haven’t prepared them for the conclusion, confused because the solution lacks clarity, or dissatisfied because characters act out of character, they won’t recommend your book to others or read your next book. Readers’ frustration often comes from the following mistakes.

8.   The first indication of the villain and the motive

Give the reader the facts to solve the crime, but don’t make those obvious.

Plant clues and red herrings throughout the book. Don’t bunch them at the end.

9.   Illogical, coincidental, or incredible solutions

Surprise but satisfy with your solution. You want readers to say, “Oh, yes. Now I get it.”

In fiction, readers expect to receive all the answers. They also expect justice.

10. Villain reveals all

If the bad guy has to explain why and how, rework your plot.

Wrap up all the loose ends, starting with the subplots. (If you’re writing a series, a loose end or two may help propel the reader into your next book).

Avoiding all ten of these mistakes doesn’t mean the author has produced a good manuscript. Making several of them guarantees the manuscript requires a lot of rewriting.

 

 

 

Posted in Mysteries, Writing

Kindle Edition of Show Me the Murder Released

Carolyn Mulford Posted on September 13, 2013 by CarolynSeptember 13, 2013

In February, Five Star released Show Me the Murder in hardback ($25.95). In September, the publisher released the Kindle edition ($3.19).

Buyers save $22.76 on the electronic version! Plus part of a tree. The difference in price amazes me.  I’m tempted to buy the e-book myself.

I prefer to read newspapers, magazines, and (especially) books on paper. When I went to China, I took a Kindle with a small library on it. The Kindle provided entertainment (and language training) on the endless airplane flights. At home I reach for paper first. I hope I’m never desperate enough for reading material to read a novel on my iPhone.

Publishers used to put out the high-priced, sturdy hardback first. A year later they would release a low-priced paperback. Now many skip the paperback in favor of the e-book.

I don’t care which edition people read. I just want them to read my story.

—Carolyn Mulford

Posted in Events, News, News releases, Show Me Series

Working with Beta Readers

Carolyn Mulford Posted on August 21, 2013 by CarolynAugust 21, 2013

While writing a book and rewriting trouble spots, I rely on critique partners. When I finish the penultimate draft, I recruit people who read but don’t write mysteries. I give them the manuscript with ten questions and suggest they look at the questions before and after they read. Some answer all questions; some write comments on the manuscript; some write a book report. If possible, I take my beta readers to dinner to discuss the book.

 

The questions serve two purposes:

They cover the general and a few specific things I need to know;

They guide insecure readers and assure them they can give helpful comments.

 

The questions below, written for Show Me the Murder, follow my typical pattern, touching on such key questions as when the reader identified the killer and such specific ones as whether romantic encounters ring true. The questions never give away the plot. 

  1. Was what happened clear? Did you need more explanation of who did it or what Boom had done? Did the plot seem credible as you read it? 
  1. Were any of the characters unbelievable or inconsistent?
  1. When did you know who did it? Whom did you suspect as you were reading?
  1. Did any part of the book seem slow?  Would you have put it down if you’d taken it from the library? Did the book seem long?
  1. Did Phoenix’s scenes with Neil and Stuart ring true?
  1. Could you visualize the settings of the major scenes?
  1. Did you expect to find out who shot Phoenix in Istanbul?
  1. Were the three main characters appealing and believable throughout? How did you like their relationship?
  1. Were there any characters you couldn’t keep straight?
  1. What did you like the most? The least?
—Carolyn Mulford
Posted in News, Rewriting and Editing, Show Me Series

Tips for Assessing Your Own Manuscript

Carolyn Mulford Posted on August 21, 2013 by CarolynAugust 21, 2013

Every writer turns into an editor at some point, but finding the weaknesses in your own manuscript challenges any writer. Years ago I developed a visual assessment system to help freelance writers evaluate short nonfiction work quickly and objectively.

This week I’m serving on a panel at Killer Nashville called Be Your Own Editor. I’ve expanded my assessment system into the handout below to help novelists spot problems and begin solving them.

1. Riffle or scroll through your entire manuscript.

     If pages look gray, expect poor paragraphing, long descriptions, info dumps.

Watch for long sections with lots of dialogue or long sections with no dialogue.

2. Turn through each chapter.

      Do the same visual check as above.

      Summarize the chapter’s action in one sentence.

Read the end of each chapter to see if it propels the reader to the next chapter.

Read the opening to see if the reader who put down the book will be lost.

3. Look at each page.

      If you see only two or three paragraphs, expect to rewrite.

Check the first word or phrase of each paragraph. Openings should vary.

Look for periods. If most sentences are long or the same length, rewrite.

      Read the verbs. If they don’t tell you what happens on that page, rewrite.

4. Look at each paragraph.

      If a paragraph is more than ten lines long, it may contain an info dump, etc.

If you have many short paragraphs of dialogue, you may need more tags.

      Read the end of one paragraph and the opening of the next to check the flow.

5. Check the sentences.

      Be sure the strongest structure (subject-verb-object) dominates.

Rewrite most sentences beginning with  it’s or there’s.

If a sentence contains more than three prepositional phrases, rewrite it.

6. Study the words.

Look for excessive to be verbs and modified verbs (watch for ly).

     Ferret out verbs hidden in nouns, such as make a decision, give a recommendation, reach a conclusion, do an analysis.

Look again at nouns modified with more than one adjective.

Trace all pronouns back to the intended antecedent.

Check all it’s/its, there’s (are), there/their, your/you’re.

Use your computer to find overused words, such as shrug, nod, just, smile.

7. Read aloud to check sound, rhythm, and pace.

—Carolyn Mulford

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Schedule of Events: August-September 2013

Carolyn Mulford Posted on August 13, 2013 by CarolynAugust 15, 2013

Putting Our Past into Fiction: Memory Is Not Enough
10 a.m., Friday, August 2
Columbia Senior Activity Center, 1121 Business Loop 70, Columbia
Open to all

Be Your Own Editor: Make Your Book the Best It Can Be
panel; 2:10 p.m., Friday, August 23
Killer Nashville, Hutton House Hotel, Nashville Open to conference registrants

Using Sidekicks and a Supporting Cast to Drive Plot and Reveal Character
panel; 11:20 a.m., Sunday, August 25
Killer Nashville, Hutton House Hotel, Nashville Open to conference registrants

Discussion of Show Me the Murder
3 p.m., Saturday, September 7
AAUW Book Group, West Broadway Hy-Vee, Columbia Open to all

Reading for Life
9 a.m., Sunday, September 15
Forum, Unitarian Universalist Church, 2615 Shepherd Boulevard, Columbia Open to all

 

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Carolyn Mulford Posted on September 7, 2026 by CarolynSeptember 7, 2026

Each Labor Day I remember the high point in my life, reaching the rim of Mount Kilimanjaro, a dormant snow-topped volcano rising more than 19,000 feet in Tanzania. In late summer1963, four other Peace Corps Volunteers (Ethiopia I) and I vacationed in colonial East Africa. Our five-day trek (three up, two down) started badly. We missed our morning flight to the base and spent an exhausting, and fascinating, cross-country trip on buses and vans.  We arrived at the lodge sometime between 1 and 2 a.m. They’d given our rooms to others but invited us to stretch out on the bench … Continue reading →

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Carolyn Mulford Posted on July 31, 2026 by CarolynJuly 31, 2026

It’s hard to find even a used hard copy of The Feedsack Dress, but Cave Hollow Press just issued a new e-edition on Amazon’s Kindle ($2.99). You can also read the opening chapters there for free. I finished the first draft in 1976. After living in Ethiopia, Austria, and Washington, D.C., I was struck by the huge changes in my northeast Missouri farm community and wanted to share my observations. I read social and economic histories and decided to set the book in 1949, a time of great transition for the whole country and for farms like ours. We were … Continue reading →

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Carolyn Mulford Posted on July 1, 2026 by CarolynJuly 1, 2026

I’ve been feeling uninformed about how places around the country are celebrating the 250th anniversary. That’s probably because I spent most of 1975 and early 1976 promoting Bicentennial events and sites to tourists in six countries: Canada, Mexico, the United Kingdom, France, Germany, and Japan. The plum contract came from the late U.S Travel Service, Department of Commerce. I don’t know how USTS’s successor works, but here’s what I did 50 years ago. USTS was one of my freelance clients when the job offer came. The small office worked with the U.S. travel industry, private and public, to attract visitors … Continue reading →

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Carolyn Mulford Posted on April 22, 2026 by CarolynApril 22, 2026

In case you haven’t heard, April is National Poetry Month. I’m no poet (see proof below), but at times over the last 75 years I’ve scribbled verses, usually on special occasions, to entertain myself and friends. I’ve also found attempting to commit poetry to be therapeutic, particularly in coping with grief. The discipline of writing in even loose forms provides this prose writer with a distraction, and maybe a clarification. Reading verse written years ago can be satisfying because of the memories it brings back. I’m sharing some from my years (1962-1964) as a Peace Corps Volunteer in Dessie, Ethiopia, … Continue reading →

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Carolyn Mulford Posted on March 31, 2026 by CarolynMarch 31, 2026

The recent distressing events in Iran remind me of working there in 1969, 10 years before revolutionaries took over the American embassy and held the staff hostage. I’m still mystified about why my employer, the United Nations Industrial Development Organization, sent me, a lowly editor, to discuss an agreement with the Ministry of the Economy to participate in a month-long international trade fair in Tehran. My only related experience had been serving as a press officer and general assistant at a similar fair in Budapest. My primary Iranian contacts were two former UNIDO employees, one a friend named Ali. They … Continue reading →

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